Dear SaraRoseNY, Thank you for such a sophisticated correction! The expressions such as "create atmosphere," "without strictly following the instructions," and "on one's own" are very helpful. As you revised, "perspective" is suitable to my writing, rather than "deep understanding." In addition, as you wrote, the ultimate purpose is to "deliver the best performance from our products," rather than the product itself. I totally agree with your suggestions! In the near future, I will send in another writing! Best regards, mkawa
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. I agree that gender roles were essential to make a society prosper before industrial revolution. However, as circumstances and conditions of a society change, people also should develop gender view and elevate fundamental rights of the weak for better future. Having happiness is not guaranteed to those who are strong positions in a society, but the right to be happy should be certified to all citizens. As we can have more wealth than the past century, basic human lights and the right to practice self-decision should be recognized as an essential social standard. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Thank you for your feedback. Your detailed explanations were easy to follow, and the alternative words you showed me helped me expand my vocabulary!
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Thank you so much for your detailed explanation.
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Currently, after the end of travel ban, a lot of hospitality campanies try creating exciting and enjoyable attractions to alure more foreign customers. Although they want to make interesting events, safety should be placed at first priority not to cause accidents and troubles. There are travel information spots in Tokyo, so they should provide the information about public rules in Japan. To make the trip to Japan a pleasant memory, knowing the proper public etiquette in Japan will help foreigners understand Japanese culture. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. I appreciate that you analyzed the heinous burglaries in the Kanto region. According to the news reports, as you mentioned, obsolescence of a traditional virtue “do unto others as you would have others do unto you” may work critically to increase selfish young people. In addition, social network services accelerate their biased thinking as they consider how they become wealthy without making an effort. Furthermore, as a result of relocating factories abroad in several decades, a decline of moderate wage work polarizes the young into a small number of rich and many low-wage simple workers. While the ringleader exploits those who are desperate for their future with alluring lucrative offer on the social media, some may apply the break-ins, expensive car thefts, and burglaries. Currently, when the young hope having stable and moderate wages, they have to require academic carriers, decent behaviors, and something special vocational related qualifications. In this point of view, parents responsibility is essential to instruct their children to have patience, collaboration, direct communication, and continuous efforts for their better future. These wisdoms are still vital for the young. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. As differences of physical appearences, I remember Ms.Naomi Osaka who is one of the world-class tennis players. Her mother is a Japanese and her father is Haitian, so she is a person of mixed races. As a result, her skin color is light black and hair is black hair(Kinky). After she won the U.S. open tennis tournament, her mother answered on an iterview of TV news programme. When Naomi was going to enter elementary school in Japan, she decided moving to the U.S to protect her because they were afraid of bullying at school due to clear appearence gap with Japanese students. Accepting tolerance is difficult to realize even now, I think that schools should have classes about the importance of diversity for the better future. As Japan needs economic migrants to sustain our society, tolerance would be indispensable to live together in communities. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Although there are strict regulations regardung election campaign and fund, family reputation still help the candidates win the election. However, a political field is so tough that descendants of the famous political family frequently lose their status in the long run. Talented politicians can survive and their inherent family statuses are powerless when they don't have the skill to negotiate with other lawmakers. I don't think the job of a politician is as privileged as it appears on TV. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Best regrds, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Your logical flow is easy to understand and persuasive. I try to brush up my writting skill in English essays. Best regards, 5971mak
