I appreciate your review. Thanks to your corrections, my sentences are easier to understand.
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. I will pay attention more to grammatical number agreement to brush up my writting skill in English. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that develop the content logically. I will brush up my writting skill as you instruct in today's essay. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. Kanazawa City has been working to promote sports by formulating the Kanazawa Citizens' Sports Promotion Plan in March 2005, as they proposed the basic principles of "enhancing the lifelong sports lives of its citizens" and "realizing a lifelong sports society" so that citizens can enjoy sports anytime, anywhere, and forever. In particularly, having a good health has become essential to be productive in our society that is rapidly aging. The Great Noto Earthquake devasteted a wide region of our Noto peninsulae, sports events are one of the critical activities for revitalizing. Through sports activities, they can have a funtime and more economic activities while opening street eatery stands around venues. As a result, more residents can manufacture the bonds among residents in affected areas and people living in remote places, resulting more hope in their challenging time. I believe that the power of hope can help the struggles overcome a lot of difficulties with aids and supports from those who are in other places. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Thank you very much for your feedback. I learned a lot of new expressions from your comments.
Thank you, as always.
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. I review the use of subjective adjectives as you mentioned to write logical progression of an essay. Best regards, 5971mak
Hi SaraRoseNY, Thank you for the revision! Reading your rewriting version, I could understand how to tell my point much clear in writing. Also I found I need to use and study vocablaries. Thank you again. Have a wonderful weekend!
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for your kind instruction regarding my poor vocabulary. I understand that I should have written more elaborated expressions for war, such as harrowing images, devastating toll, profound human suffering, the egregiousness of war, and the human toll and devastation. I will use these phrases to express the profound effects war has on humanity. Since human memory has faded, war-themed films and documents are critical to stopping current wars and preventing further conflicts. I believe that Graves of the FireFlies is one of the masterpieces that tells profound human suffering during war time. This kind of films should be broadcasted more to remind the public of the egregiousness of war. Best regards, 5971mak Best regards, 5971mak
