Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
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Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. I understand that I should pay attention to the flow of contexts for the reader. By adding connective explanation between topics, my essay can become more persuasive. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corresctions that are helpful to me. Although people are well-informed aout the deterioration of nature by plastic wastes, disposable plastic bags are still common due to their convenience. To change current circumstances, the government should obligate stores to sell a one-time palstic bags for 100yen per bag. Currently, it costs only 5 - 6 yen a bag, but the price doesn't make sense when we consider nature protection. Seeing the obvious effect of cigarette price hike for smoking cessation, same effect can be expected if government takes strict decision. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. As more and more people move to urban regions, the number of motor vehicles elevates and residents live in a lot of private cars. Thus, authorities should implement strict regulations to protect them. Best regards, 5971mak
Dear SaraRoseNY Thank you for the detailed comments. As you said, I try to use a vriety of subjects from now. 'This has been helpful for me' is a good example. I'll keep going. From Lavender46516
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Evolution has a lot of mysteries that should be revealed for understanding how the natural selections and rearrengements. Is it random happenings or need for adaptation to changing environments? The findings of evolution can teach us how important we should pay attention to maintain ecosystem and habitable environment. Therefore, I'm very interested in how humans have evolved and are changing in the future. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. I understand that balanced details of my reasons can strengthen my essay. I would like to pay attention to the equal length of each reason in my writing. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. A proverb " Time is money." is true when pressed for time. As aging society of Japan, I think that more people demand convenience stores to save time in busy days to look after their families. Since the stores always try improving a selection of items for customer's daily needs, people often feel glad that convenience stores exist while having caregiving and house tasks simultaneously. Having the convenience stores is now essential for residents to save time in communities in Japan. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. As social media platforms have gained more and more influence to those who use smartphones, they should implement fact-checking, unbiased stance, and verified articles to inform accurate articles. Currently, low-quality internet news sites often claim biased opinions and false data. I am afraid that a democratic society may collapse when such suspicious articles are spreaded by irresponsible organizations. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. A proverb " The customer is God" is one of the common social norm in Japan. As a result, many restaurants, accomodations, and entertainment business urge their emplyees to do self-sacrifice for their customers. This idea is one of the Japanese virtue on positive side, but it may lead to no break and workholic. As aging society produse those who quit their jobs for their family care, working atmosphere gradually changing recently. The work-life balance seems better than before in Japan. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections and rearrengement that are helpful to me. In Japan, one of the traditional virtues is self-sacrifice to their companies and authorities even if they urge themselves to repress their hopes and demands. As a result, many workers endure having quarrels at home due to a lack of private time. Enough time off is indispensable for them to have meaningful time at home. Employees' private time is not only for a bed time but also for a family time to raise a sense of belongings and relaxing with their families. Work-life balance should be improved to make workers have more happiness through reduction of self-sacrifice. Best regards, 5971mak
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Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. Fresh vegetables like tomato, cucumber, cabbage, and leafs are main portion of my meals while having adequate amount of seafood. Since my parents are both diabetes, I always pay attention to eating carbohydrates. As a result, my diet therapy is still effective to stop deterioration of my health with HbA1c 6.0% which is within a normal range, referencing with the abnormal number 6.5% for diabetis. Best regards, 5971mak
