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Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. As you mentioned high salt intake in Japanese cuisine, we have soy sauce, salted squid"shiokara", miso soup, and salted vegetables that are preferences for many Japanese. Since these dishes are served from childhood, many Japanese become addicted to salty taste without knowing it. It is said that Japanese salty dishes may cause salt addiction to many people. To decrease the level of individual's blood pressure, the Japanese government has proceeded pubic education for salt reduction in the last four decades. Thanks to the intervention, the average of daily salt consumption gradually declined from 15g/day 40 years ago to 11 g/dl in these days. However, there are many still addicts in northern part of Japan where salty products are local specialties. The government should exhort companies to label warnings on the salty food products that contain a lot of salt as it mentions "not to eat too much for good health" and " having small amount to enjoy longer". Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. As for the unemployment situation in Japan, I'm not optimistic about it. Since the Japan's economy has stagnated, many companies relocated their factories abroad that diminish a lot of factory workers' jobs. In addition, as our society has been aging and shrinking, domestic consumption declined and many businessess moved their offices overseas to raise sales amount. Naturally, if office workers hope to continue working in their companies, it is mandate for them to work well in foreign countries. However, many workers are not good at speaking English and familiar with diversity. The circumstances surrounding corporations are the same as before, so many newcomers have difficulty in doing their tasks. Due to facing these conditions, some of the young choose entrepreneuer who become a company with only one president. Furthermore, since some of the young are hesitate to communicating with face-to-face, this factor accelerates such lonely bosses nowadays. But it's still a good case for them to make profits, and in many cases, due to lack of experience, they frequently go bankrupt. This condition seems to increase the number of reclusives in Japan as well. After they experienced a variety of setbacks, a small number of them can start working again but their jobs are mainly simple job workers such as a percel delivery person, a convenience store clerk, a taxi driver, and so on. The remains continue staying at home in their room with the internet while refraining from social interaction. In my opinion, it is the most important thing for them to find what they want to pursue and accomplish in their lives before they graduate schools. I believe that such motivation can help them hone skills and develop their unique advantages. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. I understood that "hobby" is a tricky word that needs replacing with "pastime", "activities", and "preferences". Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Hello SaraRoseNY, Very nice! I like your English writing. You read between the lines and make it into a beautiful sentence, thank you. You used a funny English word, 'per se'. It doesn't look like an English word, it's peculiar English word. I found the meaning of it, that is , "used to say that something is being considered alone, apart from anything else" I want to use it in my essay. See you the next time, Yoko
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. I will review your correction in detail to brush up my writting. Thank you very much. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. I agree with your anticipation; low-income families for public schools and high-income families for private counterparts. When high school tuition becomes free, wealthy families can invest more extra clam schools and even private tutors that will widen a gap of academic performance between public and private schools. Even so, free high school tuition policy can still expand higher education for all students. So, in general, the policy is reasonable and profitable for society. The problem of this policy is that talented students in public institutions have difficulty acquiring chances entering prestigious universities due to a lack of educational spending for their university schooling. Thus, affirmative action such as well-organized scholarships should be implemented to reduce negative collateral influence of the free tuition policy. Although the number of the talented may be small, they should be endowed with chances to enter privileged schools supported by enough amounts of subsidies. Education is a critical investment for the future, so the government should increase more budgets for education. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Yes, there is obvious a lack of mutual understanding between the elderly and the young. Since our family structure became a nuclear family that consists of parents and children, many young people are now not familiar with their grandparents daily life with weakening physical strength. As a result, when their grandparents exacerbate and are forced to move ther children's house, many of the young may confuse how to look after their elderly family. Through the world event as a volunteer, I think that the unfair situation to elderly should be changed to provide a good opportunity for understand each other. Since it is a big event and attract many people including elderly people and foreign visitors, the organizer and Osaka City government should place the event for education to young generation. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. I am very happy to hear that wasyoku was resistered as one of UNESCO's intangible cultural assets. Through popurality of the Japanese cuisine, more people are interested in our food. Our culinary dishes have different aspect of deliciousness such as raw fish, deep fried dishes, noodles, and a lot of vegitables. Although many young people prefer eating western dishes, many foreigners are interested our Japanese food. Through food cultures, we may understand more in detail mutually. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. In Japan, as Japanese demographic is aging, more adults have responsibility for both child rearing and care giving for their elderly parents. Thus, more people become elderly, more individuals have less their private time and hurry-up when they go out unintentionally. As a result of a lack of spare time, some may run on moving escalators to save time. On the other hand, more elderly become fragile and may fall down on moving steps bumped by small contact of a person who are in a hurry. It is urgent for the Japanese government to take action for public safety regarding fragile elderly. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
