Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Thank you very much. Your supplementary explanation is very helpful!
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Thank you very much. I'll try not to add a verb at the end position.
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Although "filial piety" is still one of the good deeds in Japan, it becomes difficult for adults to put the custom in practice for their elderly parents. No effective solution has been developed yet. The Japanese government and we should tackle to improve the circumstances of the elderly. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. As the lawyer you talked with mentioned, the Japanese government strongly maintain the traditional idea of a family system in Japan. While Japanese society has gradually transformed to allow diversity, the old idea is surprisingly tough as international marriage has a lot of processes to do. Even in case of getting a marriage permission from the Japanese government, spouse residential visas might not published which led the spouses to go back their countries. The Japanese government still protect traditional view regarding a family system with marriages. As far as Japanese citizens follow the traditional view and customs, we can deserve to have a variety of supports from the government. Globalization with accepting economic migrants in Japan, the obsolete idea would fade out little by little. Although a spirit of collective harmony is useful, individualism should be spread to raise more happiness to children. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Japan is a country that is prone to earthquakes, with magnitude 7 earthquakes occurring every year. Earthquake prediction is still difficult to practice, but technology to reduce earthquake damage has made great strides. Nowadays, when building a house in Japan, it is mandatory to design it to prevent an earthquake damage. I hope that earthquake prediction will be further developed. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Dear Sara, Thank you for your helpful corrections! I'll keep writing! Have a great weekdnd! Best regards, Midori
Thank you. The sentence you corrected is clearer.
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. Last week, I read a novel on this topic. The title was "AI Judged Him Guilty." The story begins with a scene where AI is being experimentally introduced to the judiciary system in several courts in Japan. At first, AI seems to be beneficial as it significantly reduces the workload of judges. During the trial duration, a heinous incident occured in which an 18-year-old high school boy murdered his father. Since the state of the murder were severely brutal (he stabbed his father to pieces), there was a possibility that the death penalty would be sought. In Japan, the death penalty cannot be sentenced unless two or more people are killed. Subsequently, as the trial proceeded, the AI sentenced him to death. However, one of judges started reexamining the case because the defendant's appearance did not seem to be that of a criminal. As a result, the real culprit was found to be the 16-year-old his brother. The father was very violent to them on a daily basis, especially towards the weaker brother. Unable to bear the physical abuse, the younger brother killed his father unintentionally to escape the hell. The older brother wanted to protect his younger brother and decided to take the crime. Leaving aside cases of murder for pleasure, murder cases have considerable circumstances and special backgrounds that only the people involved can sympathize with and understand. For this reason, I am against the introduction of AI judges in court. Best regards, 5971mak
Dear Sara, Thank you for your helpful corrections!I'll keep trying! Best regards, Midori
Thank you.
Teacher SaraRoseNY I understand that the new sixth sentence you've added in today's my essay. Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
