Hi SaraRoseNY, Thank you for the revision! Reading your rewriting version, I could understand how to tell my point much clear in writing. Also I found I need to use and study vocablaries. Thank you again. Have a wonderful weekend!
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for your kind instruction regarding my poor vocabulary. I understand that I should have written more elaborated expressions for war, such as harrowing images, devastating toll, profound human suffering, the egregiousness of war, and the human toll and devastation. I will use these phrases to express the profound effects war has on humanity. Since human memory has faded, war-themed films and documents are critical to stopping current wars and preventing further conflicts. I believe that Graves of the FireFlies is one of the masterpieces that tells profound human suffering during war time. This kind of films should be broadcasted more to remind the public of the egregiousness of war. Best regards, 5971mak Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. In Japan, prestigious rare artworks are usually protected with a stand-type chain in front of them when exhibition is held to prevent accidents. In addition, when situation becomes crowded, sentry staff stands beside the paintings so that organizers can protect the assets. Although educational aspects of them are critical, parents should teach their children prudent manner to watch them closely. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. As Japanese demographics ages, more people are struggling in having cooking time in daily life to look after their elderly parents. Frozen food can help them handle daily tasks by saving cooking time. The ready-to-eat meals has become one of the essentials for our daily life nowadays. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. I understand that I should have mentioned the duration of the statistics. As you supposed, these numbers are annual numbers. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Thank you, as always.
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. Since Noto Great Earthquake occurred in my prefecture, I can see there are still a lot of rubble and devastation. The affected regions have been struggling to settle not only difficulty building new houses for residents but also recovering damage of seacoast that is lifeline for fishery there. Our local government expect the affected residents will need a decade to recover their damages. In particular, as the areas are popular for tourism, the school trips can activate the local economy. Thus, I hope that more schools would plan school trips for reconstruction of disaster-striken areas. Best regards, 5971mak
Dear SaraRoseNY, Thank you for your correction and suggestion. The hybrid approach - opportunities to think independently, and the habit of asking necessary questions to confirm each action - was eye-opening! Yes, that would be suitable and acceptable for them. I should try it. In addition, I didn't know the danger of "name calling." Thank you for telling it. I just looked up the phrase on the internet dictionary, but these unfamiliar expressions should not have been used. In the last sentence, you kindly added clause, "which are crucial for business success and employee growth." That was actually what I wanted to write! Thank you so much for your suggestion, again. I'll review them repeatedly, and remember these expressions! Have a good weekend! Best regards, mkawa
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. I increase my vocabulary with "a health-conscious lifestyle", "the wider public", "budget and space constraints", and "substitute discount coupons". Best regards, 5971mak
