Thank you. The sentence you corrected is clearer.
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. Last week, I read a novel on this topic. The title was "AI Judged Him Guilty." The story begins with a scene where AI is being experimentally introduced to the judiciary system in several courts in Japan. At first, AI seems to be beneficial as it significantly reduces the workload of judges. During the trial duration, a heinous incident occured in which an 18-year-old high school boy murdered his father. Since the state of the murder were severely brutal (he stabbed his father to pieces), there was a possibility that the death penalty would be sought. In Japan, the death penalty cannot be sentenced unless two or more people are killed. Subsequently, as the trial proceeded, the AI sentenced him to death. However, one of judges started reexamining the case because the defendant's appearance did not seem to be that of a criminal. As a result, the real culprit was found to be the 16-year-old his brother. The father was very violent to them on a daily basis, especially towards the weaker brother. Unable to bear the physical abuse, the younger brother killed his father unintentionally to escape the hell. The older brother wanted to protect his younger brother and decided to take the crime. Leaving aside cases of murder for pleasure, murder cases have considerable circumstances and special backgrounds that only the people involved can sympathize with and understand. For this reason, I am against the introduction of AI judges in court. Best regards, 5971mak
Dear Sara, Thank you for your helpful corrections!I'll keep trying! Best regards, Midori
Thank you.
Teacher SaraRoseNY I understand that the new sixth sentence you've added in today's my essay. Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Thank you. I'll keep trying to correct the unnatural position of a verb.
Thank you. Your examples which show how to combine sentences are very helpful.
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Thank you very much. I'll keep trying to understand the "top-short' English structure.
Dear Sara, Thank you for your helpful corrections and warm comments. I'll keep writing! Thanks! Best regards, Midori
Thank you for your feedback and informative view on this topic!
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Dear SaraRoseNY, Thank you very much for correcting my sentences. I understand what a photo exercise aimed and I didn't do it. Before writing this composition, I asked IDIY office if it's OK to write what I think of the image of the photo, then they said it's OK, so I wrote what I thought of the image. However, your explanation is right. I will try to describe the image next time. Thank you very much. Best regards, atsuko5
Dear SaraRoseNY, Thank you for your kindness and advice! Your encouragement (not only for my English writing, but also for my life story) is always empowers me. Starting with "by conducting experiments beforehand,..." was similar structure to Japanese explanation. I thought that explanation of something has to be later position in English, but you revised like that sometimes, so there are some common methods in both languages. From now on, I try to make sentences more understandable and clearer, using this method. I also learned the importance of indirect speech. In addition, more effective expressions of policy, such as "approach," "strategy," and "vision" are so helpful. I'm sorry I couldn't say thank you earlier. Have a great Sunday. Best regards, mkawa
