>However, conclusions should not have new information thrown in unless this is only a part of your writing. Thank you for this very helpful feedback. I hadn’t realized it until you pointed it out, but you’re absolutely right. I’m sure there was a better way to wrap up the essay without introducing new information at the end. I learned a lot from this! >How would you weigh your decision to get married vs the one your siblings and friends made? I think both my decision to get married and my siblings’ and friends’ decisions to remain single are perfectly fine. It’s simply a matter of choice. Some people might look at me and think I lost something by getting married. In fact, when I was single, I sometimes felt the same way about married people. But after getting married, I realized that while I may have lost some things, I’ve also gained a lot. That doesn’t mean I think I’ve gained something that single people haven’t. Someone once said that comparing yourself to others is the beginning of unhappiness, and I think that pretty much sums it up. 】I ended up throwing away a lot of books and refused to even give them away. The book was reprinted and there were no issues. I totally understand how you felt! I feel the same way when I find a mistake in a document I’ve created for work. Even if I’m probably the only person who would ever notice it, I still regret it. After all, it’s my work, just like a painting is an artist’s work. So you’ve published books! That explains a lot. Now I understand where your deep insight into writing and your strong sense of logic come from. Are you a writer? That’s amazing! 】My explanation was that men don't discuss such things as much as women do. Yeah, I think you’re right. I don’t know if this is true of all men, but my male friends and I have never really talked much about relationships, even when we were younger. We mostly talked about motorcycles and cars. Come to think of it, maybe none of us, myself included, was very popular with women, so perhaps we just didn’t have much of a love life to talk about! Haha.
Oh no, I can’t believe I left out “will”! Such a basic mistake. I’m really frustrated with myself for missing that. I also didn’t know the expression “weave A into B,” but interestingly, Japanese has an expression that is almost identical in meaning. Language is fascinating that way. “Ramble on and on” was new to me too. When I looked up the meaning of “ramble,” I realized that Japanese also has a very similar way of expressing the same idea. I really enjoy the process of organizing my thoughts as I write and thinking about how best to communicate them to another person. Writing sometimes feels to me like painting or sculpture: when it is done well, it can be beautiful, and perhaps even become a form of art. Thank you, as always, for your thoughtful feedback.
Thank you very much for your detailed feedback. Your comment that I could have mentioned regenerative medicine itself a little more in relation to these regulations, and that this branch of medicine was the real core of the issue, was extremely insightful. I felt as though you had seen right through me. I agree with you 100%. That was exactly what I should have focused on more. At the same time, given the 100-word limit, I chose this time to prioritize using phrases and vocabulary that I had recently learned. What I always appreciate about your feedback is that you do not look at my writing only as an English exercise. I can also sense your perspective of asking, “How can you communicate what you want or need to say to the reader as effectively as possible?” That is one of the reasons I trust your guidance so much. I had not known the word “acumen,” so I learned something new from your comment as well. Thank you again, and I look forward to your continued guidance.
Thank you, as always, for helping me expand the range of expressions I can use. I already knew the word "refrain," but seeing "refrain from cooperating" used in this context was a real eye-opener. I thought, "Oh, so that's how I can use it!" It really clicked for me, and I was very happy because it felt like I was turning vocabulary I already knew into something I could actually use. As for the game theory point, I left out the details because of the word limit. More precisely, what I meant was: "In a prisoner's-dilemma-type situation, the most rational decision is to refrain from cooperating." Thank you again for your helpful feedback! Best, Tomo_0111
Thank you very much for your detailed feedback. I found your comments especially helpful in understanding the difference between conversational and more formal writing. Your explanation of “has suffered from it” and “has been suffering from it” was also very useful, especially the idea that the present perfect connects a past experience to the present. I also learned a lot from expressions such as “diligence with his treatment” and “project into the future.” As for the style I would like to work on, I think semi-formal writing would suit me best. I would like my English to sound natural and conversational, but still appropriate for written English. When there is a useful difference, I would be happy to see both a conversational version and a slightly more formal version. Thank you again for your thoughtful feedback.
Thank you very much for your detailed feedback. Your point about making the connection between foreign workers and investment in labor-saving technologies more explicit was specially helpful. I can see that “innovation” was too broad for what I wanted to say. I also found your suggestion about playing devil’s advocate useful, and I would like to try that structure in a future essay. Thank you again, and I hope you have a great weekend too.
Thank you very much for your detailed feedback. Your explanation of “which” was especially helpful. I now understand that, in my original sentence, “which” could be interpreted as referring to “the scenery” rather than to the action of looking into the distance. I also learned a lot from your suggestion to use “so” instead of “and,” because it makes the cause-and-effect relationship much clearer. These two points were especially useful for me, and I’ll keep them in mind in my future writing. Thank you again for your encouraging comments and clear explanations.
Thank you very much for your detailed feedback. I learned a great deal from it. What struck me most was your suggestion about which sentence could work better as the introduction. It really opened my eyes to the importance of thinking not only about what to write, but also about where to place each sentence for maximum effect. Interestingly, many of the points you raised are actually very similar to the advice I give my own subordinates when I review their writing at work. However, when I write in English, I somehow forget to apply those same principles to my own writing. Your feedback made me suddenly realize that. Thank you again. Your comments were extremely helpful and gave me a new perspective on my English writing.
Thank you for your feedback. You are right. Many Japanese workers work overtime, but they often do not work very hard during their regular hours. They could work more effectively and go home earlier. As always, tour detailed explanations were easy to follow, and the alternative sentences you shared were very useful!
Thank you for your feedback. I saw news about wildfires in Madrid. Are you and your loved ones are safe? I also worried about wildlife that may have lost home. As always, your detailed explanations were easy to follow, and the alternative sentences you shared were useful. In particular, the words "next to none," "fall behind on their payments," and "a microcosm of society," were very interesting to learn. Thank you again!
Thank you very much for correcting my composition, even though you are very busy!
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I really appreciate you and your friend praying for my daughter.
I imagine that your son and his girlfriend had many stories of their trip.
I like camomile tea, but I didn't know it's good to place them on our eyes.
