Hello, Florianna. How are you doing? Thank you for the corrections you made on my essay. I found an interesting point in the 1st sentence that you wrote. "athleticism" and "deftness" is both uncountable noun, so when they come together, they are still uncountable. therefore you wrote "is required"; you didn't write "are required" I was puzzled for a while, but eventually understood. In the 3rd sentence, you wrote "go on to live a life with new challenges". I understand what you meant to say. He doesn't have two lives, meaning that his life continues just going to a next stage. In the 4th sentence, "a more ordinary life" is, I think, a better choice than "a usual life". because, When Ayumu was an athlete, he still had an usual life as a man, and which might have been a bit of less ordinary life than a life that people have, though. ( Sorry, it's hard to tell you) In the 5th sentence, "Ayumu Goromaru who has achieved things more ordinary people can't, tend, after retiring from their sport, to be able to survive in other spheres." I don't understand this sentence, especially, why you used "more" and "their" in it. You meant to say that Ayumu is a less ordinary person? Or, Maybe just my sentence doesn't make sense to you, ( sorry, I'm trying.... but...I'm confused here again) but I like the word"spheres" on the last part, it's very interesting to me. "exalted" "with its rigours" are new expressions for me. I would like to use them sometimes. Hoping to see you soon. Yoko
Thank you so much for your corrections and suggestions. I've learned a lot and found it hard to write passive and active voice adequately. I hope I will gradually learn writing. Thank you!
Thank you so much.
Thank you, florianna. It is nice to see you again. The Olympics was a total disaster. It should be abolished once and for all.
Thanks for your correcting! Your message made me motivated, and many options you gave me was helpful. Best regards;)
Thanks for your kind message. It always encourages me. Now I am choosing a piece that I will play on the next round, and this activity is quite fun! Preparing a performance is also an important process for me to enjoy music much more! The final stage will be held in Tokyo next at the end of November. Hope you have a happy music life as well. See you soon. Toru
Thank you very much for your constructive opinions on my idea!!
Thank you for the corrections and suggestions. There were a lot of typos in your corrections, so it would have been better if you could have checked them before sending. However, your corrections were great and really gave me good suggestions.
Dear Ms. Florianna Sorry for my late reply. I just noticed that I got a message from you, not just the corrections. Thank you very much for correcting my English. I also enjoyed reading your kind comments. I hope you can check my writing again soon. Have a nice day.
Thank you very much for your excellent editing.
Dear florianna, I am very happy to hear from you and know that you and your family are well and have good time. (I hope your mother has stayed great since then.) Thank you very much for your really helpful and warm feedback as always! I learned many new interesting expressions and usages. I will try to use them in future writing. Please do keep safe and stay well. The fact that you do so always encourages me to do so here in Japan ;)
Thank you for your heartfelt comments!
Thank you for your correction with the recovered lap top, and understanding my insight from my poor English.
Thank you for your helpful suggestions!
I didn’t think that I can receive such a kind reply! I felt free to use IDIY, and I would like to try to continue IDIY in the future. I’d like to ask your service again. Thank you so much, Ms. florianna!
