Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. I wholly agree with your concern that smartphone can be a harmful tool for the young children. In case of Japan, smartphone companies offer kids version of the internet on the devices to exclude violence and porne which are harmful to their healthy growth. Although some say the freedom to know is important, I am in favor of such censorship to prevent children from delinquency. If parents feel to reduce pop-up ads for sweets and drinks for their children, they can set up blocking such advertisements. Furthermore, a search website " Yahoo Japan" provide a kids version search site so that they are kept away from bad websites without knowing it. Nowadays, the internet has become an essential tool for students and young adlts, so it is critical for parents to instill how to get along with the digital communication and information in their children. Segregation of them from the internet is inappropriate, rather, they should be aware of appropriate usage of the intenet and elevation of computer literacy. Best regards, 5971mak
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Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. In my guess, a social norm of collective harmony have maintained the seniority-based salary system in Japan. Due to the idea that everybody is evaluated with same salary depending on their ages, they can share a sense of fairness in the company. Although the situation might be helpful to raise a sense of strong camaradarie over factory employees who have to do same tasks in the past, current working situations have drastically changed like sales representative, hospitality jobs, and a variety of instructors. Subsequently, individuals' working skills become critical because their skills are commonly different. So individuals' effort is important and employers should prepare new salary system to reward each workers effort. As society changes, companies should be transformed to enhance and levarage every workers' talent so that they can be more productive to contribute to their companies. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. Since Tokyo metropolitan region have big companies which earn a lot of profit, they can offer more flexible work options. On the other hand, ordinaly companies in local areas struggle to make profit, thus, they are reluctant to implement more day off to maintain their competitiveness. The financial disparity between capital city and local cities becomes broadened. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. I agree with your opinion that “youth as a type of "talent" and pushes it hard, which cannot be further from the truth. It is a state that every one of us is blessed to have, and could be either fleeting or long-lasting depending on one's lifestyle or determination.” Thus,Ibelieve that education is critical to grow students with healthy mental growth. However, The education level available to an individual is determined largely by wealth, customs, and religious beliefs. The government should guarantee the right to an education so that those who want to learn can do so Best regards, 5971mak.
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Thank you, as always.
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. I understand that I should have written logically, so health concerns regarding plastics should be written in later half consistently. Thank you again for detailed corrections. I always appreciate your suggestions. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Dear SaraRoseNY, Thank you for sharing valuable perspective! When I was a high school student, long time ago, I learned the "so do + subject" format. But until now, I have never encountered the situation where it has been needed, and I forgot the format. Today, by learning writing through your advice, I'm so happy to have opportunity to use it in my real life. From now on, I try to use it. And I didn't know the difference between "keep up" and "catch up," so it is helpful! In addition, I wrote the phrase "state-of-the-art," because I got it in the text book of conversation class. However, it is outdated. I thought sometimes the text book isn't good. I'll use "the latest" in the similar cases. Best regards, mkawa
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are beneficial to me. I am impressed of your well-organized and logical contexts. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are useful to me. Best regards, 5971mak
Thank you for correcting my text again. I am looking forward to taking your lecture again.
Teacher SaraRoseNY Thank you for corrections that are helpful to me. I understand that I should pay attention to the flow of contexts for the reader. By adding connective explanation between topics, my essay can become more persuasive. Best regards, 5971mak
